I like the bassline, it's neat and atmospheric. But the song drags on a whole lot, and doesn't really feel like it has any sense of dynamics. The original of the song is worse in that respect though, so I guess that's some consolation.
It also, oddly enough, reminds me of the song I'm going to link.
Actually, I listen to it again and don't know what I was thinking.
El Ten Eleven - Central Nervous Piston
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=taLwyQXYnQI